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Okay, so... It seems I need premium membership for critiques, and lets be honest... that'd be a waste of money right there. So here is a very short clip of what I have done with the third episode. So far I have (more or less) finished about 1 minutes worth of animation out of 13. Good times over here.

Things I'm looking for:

Is the widescreen ratio correct? It's currently 800x450px

Does the Doctors about-face seem weird to you?

I added moving necks. Fun times

I may need to redo the run cycle... what do you guys think?



I'm currently on the third scene which in my opinion is the longest and hardest scene in this cartoon since it involves a non-pony character.
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sashauna11 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
lol
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DaniFenton12 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
It looks good to me. But never ask me for advice for anything. I think everything looks good. I seriously can't wait for this!
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AwsomeEmKay Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012
I really like the facial expression the Doc had as he fell, have you used that before or is it a new thing?
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ShebaTheLoneWolf Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
That was pretty good but the running needs work.
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Ocarinaplaya Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Yeah, I'm gonna redo the run cycle...
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ShebaTheLoneWolf Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
Then it should be about perfect :D
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Ask-Tith Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
MORE. OMG. MORE.
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darthxrane Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
The addition of the moving necks really makes this animation stand out. This is looking more and more like the show. (: The only thing I really noticed was, during the Doctor's run, his bulky Earth pony body was replaced by that of famed race horse Usain Colt. =P The Doctor became very lean. And not just his body style, but his out line....lines were suddenly incredibly thin, not matching the rest of his animation. The cycle itself is very good, I just think the body could use a bit bulking up, with thicker lines. c:

But again. This is looking fantastic. The work you put in to this is amazing. :D I feel I must thank you for taking the ungodly amount of time to do this, haha.
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themagican112233 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Epic :jawdrop: can't wait for the full version.
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Edowaado Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You've done brilliant. I really appreciate the amount of work and time you put into this. Thanks a bunch!
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mattwo Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Run cycle does seem a tiny bit off also there's a bit of text getting cut off on the left at first dunno if that is supposed to be there or not
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Ocarinaplaya Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
it's not. That's actually the stage cues I wrote for myself so that I'd know where to put the "camera." Helps with keeping the cartoon somewhat dynamic.
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ShadowDancerBrony Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
Looks amazing!
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JoeBrony Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
Bravo! :clap: please keep going.
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Mynder Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The run cylce is a bit weird, and I hope the audio will be better than this pre-release. Other than that, I can't wait for the episode to come out :D
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Ocarinaplaya Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
what sucks is that I have no control over the audio. I've already told BDR about it (as have so many other people) and I've suggested turning the mic down whenever Keiko has loud dialogue. From what I gather she has someone else compile all the audio before a release.
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mattwo Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Keiko does have a bad habbit of getting too loud doesn't he? ._.
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:iconocarinaplaya:
Ocarinaplaya Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
no, he just needs to turn down the mic volume whenever he gets excited and loud.
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:iconmynder:
Mynder Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, you'll think of something, the first two episodes haven't dissapointed ;)
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tunipeace Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
very good. the sound effects kinda seemed outta sync, but everything else is the usual goodness.
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necrolichmon Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
it works great so far. i played it a few times and i didn't see anything that is out of place.
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Ted4ever Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
(Verry Nice :D)
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Rogy56 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
Well 800px x 450px is 16:9 ratio so you're good to go on that one.

The Doctors face seems fine to me.

As for the walk cycle, it's good as far as I'm concirned, but should you decide to re-do the cycle I recommend you take a look at this: [link] for some tips/tricks

Other than that I'm really looking forward to the next episode!
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Tragodile Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
I believe the about-face the doctor did is fine. The running animation also seems good. Someone has already mentioned it but there is a "lump" on the Doc's back when he on the ground talking.

Can't wait to see the finished product. : )
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littlecrazyneko411 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
So far I like it ^^o Can't wait to see more
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mutation333 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
Looks good to meh, but what do we know about animation, huh?
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Astiam300 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Looks great, but honestly I was expecting this scene to be inside the builing where NM appeared xD
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Ocarinaplaya Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
oh right... figured since I had the doctor run out of the building in the last episode... :3
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Astiam300 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
builing? :facepalm:

Building*
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Fundz64 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
a critique you say? :iconchallengeacceptedplz:
+Well the ratio is fine! I don't have my ruler beside me but I could take a wild guess it's okay!
+I don't know what's wrog with the run.. i mean 'Trot' cycle, it seems good enough! unless you want to add more frames to make it smoother but personnaly, it would be smoother than all the other animations actions your characters are doing.
+++I really liked how you managed to pull off the full-head rotate on Doctor Hooves (looking from the left and turning to the complete opposite side)

-however, the on the last scene, when Derpy grabs the Doctor, her body seems too still.. as if she's standing on a surface.. yet her wings are flapping and she's above the ground.
-also after that scene, when the doctor is belly-flat on the ground, you can see a little 'lump' where the neck animation is separated from the torso.

Overall: :star::star::star::star::star-half:
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Ocarinaplaya Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
The derpy body staying still while pulling the Doctors tail is a complete oversight on my part. THIS IS WHY I UPLOAD THESE THINGS. Thank you for pointing that out, I'll make adjustments and continue on my animating way.


Gonna get rid of that hump too. Found a solution to that while making Jay's Memorial oddly enough.
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Fundz64 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
glad to have helped out!
I don't animate all that much, yet I studied enough to spot out stuff! :D

I think it's safe to say we all await your finished episode! ~it'll keep us busy while we all turn out thumbs in circles for the new mlp episodes! ;)
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SpriteGirl Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Waauw cool animation
Haha :XD: I love the sound when Doctor Whooves falls down (haven't heard that for a very long time)
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Atalix Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
This looks really good so far, I has waited for the continue of your animation of Doctor Whooves :dummy: But one thing I'm hearing is the audio of Doctor Whooves is a bit off when he speaks loud
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Arthus850 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
That's not his fault. He's just making an animated version of a pre established audio drama on youtube
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Atalix Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012   General Artist
Ah, ok
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lordmep Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Not bad so far. Look forward to an actual episode.
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alleghany71 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I want to see it all! It looks great so far. :)
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